I'm currently finishing up the last element of my applications for a few Canadian law schools, and I'm beginning to solicit advice from friends, family and strangers about the impact of my personal statement. One of my reviewers noted that I should clearly exhibit what I can offer to the school in my statement, and stray away from solely focusing on what draws me to the school.
I've written a personal statement for Thompson Rivers University (TRU) in Kamloops, BC, which closely adheres to their 'guidelines' for a statement, e.g. The law school is interested in 1). Your reasons for applying to law school 2). How you plan to use your law degree 3). Why you're interested in this school in particular and 4). Why you made certain academic or previous choices and how those choices affected your decision to apply to law school (readers familiar with UCalgary's personal statement requirements will notice these questions are rather familiar).
I've written a statement which I feel answers all of these questions clearly, drawing on my inspiration to attend law school gleaned through being involved in MUN and completing research on energy law and sustainability in my undergraduate degree. Furthermore, I have outlined what I plan to do with my law degree quite clearly as well. However, despite this, I cannot help but feeling like even after explaining my unique experience, motivations and career plans, I may have missed the mark in terms of illustrating "what makes [me] of particular interest to the Faculty of Law at Thompson Rivers University", especially after receiving this comment.
Does anybody have experience in this area and would like to weigh-in, or is willing to share (loosely) how they structured their statement?
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If a school has a particular prompt for a PS then you should follow it and not go too far outside the bounds of what it asks since that illustrates a failure to follow directions. One school I applied to had such a ridiculous prompt (that also said I had to include diversity in the PS if I was going to address it at all) that I had to throw out my PS and carve up my DS and fashion a totally new essay that won't end up anywhere but in the hands of the readers of that particular school.
As an example of what you can bring to the table, you might have some type of life situation that has led you to develop an incredibly hard work ethic (e.g.- you worked full time throughout college and beyond) and therefore you will be a reliable member of the law school community that they know can be counted on unlike some trust fund baby that parties all the time and had their parents get them into the school. It may sound ridiculous but it's not outside the realm of possibility, and demonstrating that you are not a liability is not a crazy point to try to get across.
From the PS help on this page, and having read a lot of other people's PS and having them review mine, I wrote mine on how my experience in a particular sport has lead me to be an ideal candidate for law school (this may sound weird, but if you want to read it, please DM me).
"The members of the Admissions Committee consider the Statement of Interest in the context of the rest of your application. Therefore it is useful for you to discuss how the
experiences you have listed elsewhere on your application are relevant to your desire to attend law school."
I tried to provide some context to particular relevant experiences I listed elsewhere as they related to my answers to the provided questions.
Certainly, I would love to read it. I'll send you a message.
@sarkisp23 Agreed, and that's what I attempted to do. It's much more persuasive and powerful when you can demonstrate an attribute instead of simply stating you have it. Thank you for your insight.