Hi everyone, I'm a little bit confused with the tone we are supposed to adopt while writing the essay. I naturally write in a formal academic tone and given what I read, it appeared to be that it was a lot more casual than formal. This is what I had written below. Is this an appropriate tone or should I write it as though I'm writing something a lot less formal (just the intro piece)?

The question of an interdisciplinary education is one that has been critically debated for centuries. One could very easily argue that the pursuit of knowledge that is specialized, and thereby, highly specific to a student’s desired career trajectory is an effective means to prepare a student for the future given that it values professional competence and focalized expertise.

However, I believe given that the evolving world seeks from it students not with a specialized understanding of a subject but instead those who are willing to interweave cross-disciplinary applications that could challenge the academic status quo, go beyond a dogmatic approach to literacy in redefining norms and values in a world ever so technologically pliable and most imperatively, orchestrate a society where knowledge domains converge, collide, and ultimately coalesce into novel forms of innovation and societal progress. Therefore, I argue that a college would serve the students’ best interests if they were to demand a more liberal education as opposed to one that is solely career-centred.