New round starting 16 Sept. Based on feedback received from some fine members here, I've made substantial modifications to my PS. Anyone up for another round of edits and comments, this time PS only? Although I kept my original topic and narrative arc, I have made significant changes to the structure and details within my PS. Would love to trade PS's with someone, new eyes or previous viewers. Hit me up if interested.

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