Hello guys, I have a rough draft of my personal statement and need feedback. Should I stick to one "story" or should I explain the many things that make me who I am today?

The idea of becoming an attorney has always been a reoccurring drive for me, stimming from me being told that “you’re a good arguer, you should be a lawyer”, possibly being an insult to me being stubborn, or me having a trait of pulling through hard times and exceling. Another drive is seeing firsthand how the legal system works in moments when people are vulnerable and need guidance. My first experience with an attorney was during family's divorce, I saw how legal representation can bring structure and resolutions to emotional situations. Even as a young teenager, I got the understanding that attorneys do more than just argue but create a pathway through uncertainty. That kind of experience gave me motivation to drive myself towards legal education, and a profession that needs both discipline and resilience.  

At sixteen my life took a dramatic turn when I was hit by a truck while walking, temporarily putting me in a wheelchair and struggling with my speech and memory. At first, I thought I couldn't pursue the life I dreamed of (at the time being a psychologist or lawyer), but instead of focusing on the negative, I pushed myself with persistence and patience. I studied more than the average person to get the grades I wanted. Instead of going to the sleepover, or going to games, I stayed home, retraining myself how to form words again. My memory slowly got better, I lost around a year and a half of memory including what my teachers in school taught me. I had to work extra hard to be where I needed to be, pushing myself to the best of my abilities. I returned to high school committed to facing every challenge thrown at me, from learning how to speak clearly and walk again, to keeping up with my classes and returning to my extracurricular activities like soccer. This wasn’t something I was open to talking about with my piers at the time, maybe coming from a thought of embarrassment, but I soon came to realize this experience single handedly taught me the significance of persistence, patience, self-discipline, and critical thinking, which are traits I definitely carried through college and that I know will help me prosper in law school.  

I went into college knowing I wanted a career that focuses on helping people, which brought me to psychology, which I loved learning about, but soon realized what I wanted more was to help people using the law to help guide and support them, similar to my personal experience. To build off my interest, I added a minor in legal studies, advancing my desire to help people with using practice legal skills. Being the first in my family to attend and graduate college, and being a child of nine, I had to manage most of my challenges independently. From figuring out applications and LSAC procedures, to managing finances. Since freshman year of college, I have supported myself, working up to three jobs while keeping up with classes, balancing responsibilities, and learning the importance of persistence, endurance and time management, which were hard earned and deeply ingrained skills I know I will bring in my studies and future career.  

These experiences, overcoming personal setbacks, challenges, and balancing responsibilities, helped shape me in who I am today.  They have taught me important attributes I have and need to be successful in my goal of becoming an attorney. I am hoping, as a first-generation college graduate, to not only achieve a goal, but pave my next path with the attributes given to me to make a difference in the lives of others as a resilient, persistent, critical thinking attorney.  

(I am going to shorten it up, this is a DRAFT)