Hello everyone!! I just did the second argumentative writing on Lawhub and I wanted to know your opinion about it. I have less than a month to improve so I would love to hear what you think about this response and is there anything I can do to improve it. Thank you so much in advance!!! I copied it exactly as it was at the end of 35 minutes:

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The parents' role in education should not exceed the role of other authorities, mainly the educators and teachers. One of the main reasons for this idea is that the authorities in that area, specifically the educators are the professionals in their field. They posses years of knowledge and experience that was earned through a long period of time teaching and analyzing the results from it. These knowledge and experience can be successfully put into practice while choosing and teaching children what they should and what they need to learn. 

Moreover, the decision of parents rests on the idea that parents already analyze and predict what their children will need and do in the future. Weaknesses in this idea are inevitable. First of all, parents' could impose their own desires and beliefs, even without realizing, into their child and one's future. On the other hand, educators equip all children with objective and broad knowledge, which is given through different subjects and their assessments. This way, one could get the basic knowledge and make a decision for themselves by analyzing what areas are in their interests and what they want to carry with themselves into the future. Another weakness in the parents' idea, which stems from the first one, is that children could not even know that their life is being influenced by their parents. This could lead to years of uncertainty in one's choice of major in the university or even one's career path. This decision should be done by children themselves and the best way they could do it is by being guided with objective and broad information acquired from their teachers. 

I certainly disagree with the perspective 1 in terms of it being rested on some assumptions. First, it assumes that the effects social media or any other negative influence on the life today will affect public schools adversely and strain the belief the parents have on school teaching methods. It assumes that parents' being able to choose for their children will counter those undesirable effects of modern harmful and inappropriate influence. This same idea also rests on the assumption that educators are not knowledgable enough to assess these same concerns. These teachers and educators, as mentioned in previous paragraph, are, first of all, in their respective fields because of their ability and their years of knowledge of teaching and education. If those educators were people who never dealt with such issues, then it might spark a debate whether they are capable enough of delivering the desired results and counter the undesirable influences. 

Another interesting idea is put forward in perspective 3 which I grant to be the example of my previous arguments about the capability of educators and teachers. The educator is capable enough to assess what is needed for child's future given the period of time they are in. The idea in this perspective about fundamental values is especially correct in that such values are fundamental for successful future of children. While parents a lot of time make assumptions or desires based on their subjective assessment or their life's period, educators such as in perspective 3 are wholly focused on objectivity and the requirements of their period of time.

Additionally, even the perspective 3 is partly supportive of my argument in terms that it indicates that parents' often judge by their own life experience and their period of living, although this argument fails to recognise that even if students are fully capable of being cautious and informed, nevertheless, the role of educators in this respect would enhance their understanding and knowledge. It could equip them with more ideas about the dangers of some content or even strengthen their own beliefs and knowledge by giving them concrete evidence. This would make them more confident in their abilities and in their actions as they move forward in life.

Despite my defense of the role of educators in the education of children, it is still correct that parents are very important in child's life, whether by guidance or giving them knowledge. We must admit that parents also possess years of experience and knowledge. But this knowledge, while being significant for child's future, might not be as precise and as professional enough as it is in educators or teachers methods of teaching. Thus, while admitting that parents should educate their children as much as they can, the ultimate requirements for future and child's knowledge is best decided by other authorities.