The only reason I'd say change is isn't b/c it's too complicated, but it sounds very "academic." Like someone writing an essay. The PS should be personal. But if your personal voice is like that, or if it goes with your PS, then keep it!
@LCMama2017 I'd say that entire part of my personal statement in which "cognizant" is used is much more academic, and it's deliberately so. Nonetheless, I changed the word to "Recognizing" :)
@"Alex Divine" So I'm guessing 2 LORs from academic professors makes more sense than NGO Board members? Depending on responses I get I'll do 2 Academic LORs and 1 Board member LOR.
... 'm guessing 2 LORs from academic professors makes more sense than ... get I'll do 2 Academic LORs and 1 Board member ... . Even still, put priority on academic LORs. While the NGO LOR ... more weight on what the academic ones have to say.