I think it sounds great man. Like others have said, just be sure to make it about you, perhaps if you have a different vision, or how you can make a different impact?
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... focus on creating a coherent vision. But we're also told ... a lack of a coherent vision? What B is saying is ... which is through a coherent vision and not pragmatic solutions.